I came up with a new idea. please evaluate

[dontgobroke]

Hey, I am a long-time lurker, first-time poster. I came up with a really cool idea called bankroll replacement. When one of my players goes broke, i'll throw them a bone. I just made my website yesterday but could some of you guys tell me if the idea is good? And how should I change/make better my website.
www.freewebs.com/dontgobroke

[DealerDan]

I'll be honest, I'm not a fan of it. Here's why:

(1) The whole concept. It's very risky for you, and also appears risky for the player. Why should they trust you? You've designed one page, made some bonus codes, then thrown it up on a free site, and they should expect you to hae the capital to handle a project like this?

(2) Design is very bad.

(3) Language used is poor.

(4) It's on a free server.

(5) Saying things like "Please notice this isn't the best offer for all players." is very counter-productive.

Don't mean to be harsh, but bad idea, bad site.

[absentx]

Yeah I think I would shorten up the paragraphs or dont make them so wide. I lost track of were I was at every time I came back to the left side to begin the next sentence.

Idea is probably workable, but I agree with DealerDan, you have to design the page much more professionally and give players a reason to trust you. Make it really official if it is infact something you are going to do.