Press Release Review

[psmoney]

Heres a press release for our site cfpokermoney.com, we were put on editorial review hold by prweb. Just wondering if we could get some feedback from anyone.
Thanks

"Learn About Online Poker, Use a Tournament Tracker.
Learn Poker Tricks, receive online poker Bonus Codes, and learn how to play Poker Card Games like Texas Holdem. Get familiar with all the rules, definitions and tips on how to win. Poker is an incredible game and nowadays, almost everyone is playing it. Just turn on the television and you can easily find a poker tournament on. And why not, poker is a game of strategy and skill that takes 10 minutes to learn and a lifetime to master. There are many online websites these days that offer poker. Start off by using our tournament tracker.

University of Maryland (PRWEB) January 1, 2006 -- Inspired by a growing fad, www.cfpokermoney.com, holds an agenda aimed towards the growth of online poker. Created and run by two undergraduate University of Maryland students, in hopes to excentuate the online poker culture through to students, and friends.

Avaiable at www.cfpokermoney.com, is indepth information about how to play poker card games such as Texas Holdem, tips for success, and ways to get involved with the online poker community. Through the featured tournament tracker on the home page of www.cfpokermoney.com, curious individuals may apply their curiousity towards tournaments and opportunities to play online poker. For more knowledge about this online community individuals may explore our forum and discuss with others just like themselves. Within our forum monthly contests may provide opportunities for individuals to acquire poker money.

For additional information on the news that is the subject of this release, contact CFPOKERMONEY (e-mail protected from spam bots), or visit www.cfpokermoney.com. Look for our online poker bonus codes through our sign up link and affiliate banners.

About CFPOKERMONEY.COM:

CFPOKERMONEY is a online poker affiliate for: Absolute Poker, Carribean Sun Poker, Full Tilt Poker, InterPoker, Paradise Poker, Party Poker, Poker Room, Pacific Poker,Stacks Poker, Titan Poker, and True Poker. On our site a patron may find rules and strategies for the game Texas Holdem. Along with tips to win at online poker, hand rankings, and our Featured Forum. Our forum is an online source for patrons to converse among each other and share experiences and advice about poker. Also within in our forum, monthly contest are run to encourage exchanges of information between patrons.

Contact:
CFPOKERMONEY
e-mail protected from spam bots
www.cfpokermoney.com

GENERAL DISCLAIMER - USE CFPOKERMONEY AT YOUR OWN RISK - CFPOKERMONEY does not give legal opinions - cfpokermoney contains Poker Tricks and objectional content - cfpokermoney and its affiliates are not ever deemed responsible for any losses or gains incurred by subscribers and patrons of cfpokermoney.com "

[GoodKarmaKid]

I haven't tried a press release yet, and I don't consider myself an expert by any means but your press release sounds way to much like an advertisement.


I think you should only reference your site's url 2 or maybe 3 times. Also, there are some grammar errors that should be corrected.

I would suggest re-writing the press release. Have a friend who isn't a poker player read it and give you some feedback.

[psmoney]

that was actually my business partner that wrote it. He is not really a poker player.

[coxquinn]

There needs to be a VERY clear news story or the press release has no direction. Either the site just launched, the site expanded, a new competition, etc.

What you have now just lists things the site does in ad form-- it needs to be like this:

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Tournament Tracker Gives Poker Players Edge on Competition

The new poker tournament tracker developed by two blha blha does this this shitsss...

JAN 3- Competitive Poker Tournaments have become incredibly popular and even more cutthroat—players are always looking for new ways to edge out and outdo their opponents. Now, the latest arsenal in the advanced poker players toolkit has arrived: the tournament tracker.. (exp of tournament tracker)

Developed by two founders of http://www.yoursitehere.com, they are excited about how tournament tracker will take poker to the next level. They are also excited about what this will bring to their already flourishing poker community. “The site already offers ____, ______, and ________, but [tournament tracker is also really sweet].”

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see how this is a NEWS/PRESS release and not an ad for the site... just my thoughts hope this helps

dont be afraid to get keywords and info about your site into it but you need the framework of a "press release" first and foremost.

[psmoney]

Thanks alot, That really does help a bunch.

[tke1600]

Dont make your release sound or look like an adveritisement at all. Dont even put one sentence in it that has to do with offering services. Journalists and readers want to read something interesting and exciting about your website, and will be turned away if they feel that you are try to sell them something. Remember it is a "press release."